Suggestion+Page


 * Put your suggestions here! :)**


 * a) Suggestions for any change in "Scene 1" (Done as a group)**


 * b) Suggestions for any change in "Scene 2" (Done as a group)**


 * c) Suggestions for any change in "Music" (Hari, Javier, Alex in charge)**

Hari, the music you sent in was great (though a little soft). I think that you might want to put that piece of music at the end, when the friend and Charles' mother regret Charles' death, and a sadder piece of music shoud be put at the beginning, as the first line is of Charles' mother crying. ~Shannon^_^

Thanks for the comments Shannon. I have uploaded a new sadder piece of music for the beginning. Have a look. ~ Hari

Is it my computer? I can't seem to hear any music in your clip, Hari, only lots of background noise... ~Cheri

I think it's your computer that has a problem, because mine can. I can hear the music, and I think it's suitable either for the beginning or the end. Both are ok. ~Alex


 * d) Suggestions for any change in "Props" (Cheri, Shannon, Shivanand in charge)**

Hi Cheri, you mentioned in the page that we need red spots. But didn't we agree on green-coloured spots instead of red (which is so common)? Green makes it stand out and also makes it funnier (more interesting). ~Alex

Ok, I put that in, Alex. ~Cheri


 * e) Suggestions for any change in "Scene 3" (Done by Javier)**

Javier, I seriously feel that you have to add in the Singlish effect in your scene. ~ Hari (I think I am voicing out others opinions on this issue)

Javier I feel it will be better to change it to the doctor coming to Charles's house.


 * f) Suggestions for any change in "Scene 4" (Done by Alex)**

Alex, I feel that you have made the Singlish version of your scene a bit too artificial. Maybe you would like to reduce the Singlish effect a bit. But still a job well done. ~ Hari

Hi Hari, thanks for your comments. Maybe we could mix the singlish and proper english version, so as to make it better. ~Alex

That will be great Alex.


 * g) Suggestions for any change in "Scene 5" (Done by Hari)**

Erm... Hari, can we make it such that when the scene transits from 5-6, Charles comes in and lies on the ground without his medicine, so that the mother will bring it in to him? ~Cheri

Sure. ~ Hari

Cheri could you please add in a bit of a Singlish effect because my scene is filled with it ( the mother and her friend ) and yours has none. I feel it will be better to continue with the Singlish effects as most of us have already done that and it provides that "homely" feeling. Secondly, nobody ever speaks perfect English when in pain nor when their panicking. Hari
 * h) Suggestions for any change in "Scene 6" (Done by Cheri)**

Ya I agree. Mine is combined Singlish with English. It sounds better with Singlish (in singapore ma!) ~Alex


 * i) Suggestions for any change in "Scene 7" (Done by Shivanand)**

Shivanand, I know you haven't written anything yet for Scene 7, so I wanted to clarify that your scene will involve the mother calling the doctors or paramedics who pronounce him dead, right? ~Cheri


 * j) Suggestions for any change in "Scene 8" (Done by Shannon)**

Shannon, I know I'm very weird sometimes, but I just find this weird: It's like it sounds very school-ish and not really soemthing an adult in distress would say... I don't know. ~Cheri
 * F:-comes out again- It was our fault, being so gullible. Now all we can do is hang our heads in shame and learn to be vigilant at all times, to provide ourselves with a secure environment, and to protect our children from...from...- breaking down - dying!**

Thanks, Cheri, so how do I change it? How about if I change it to... FYI, most adults don't actually cry like maniacs, but rather keep it to themselves, so I guess we can modify it a bit. I will not change it yet, until we agree, and if there are any further changes. If you don't like this, please tell me how to change it, I am very puzzled... ~Shannon
 * F:-comes out again- (sighing) so gullible... there's nothing to be done now. if only we could change that...and learn to be vigilant at all times, to be a better parent, and to protect our children if...if we ever have any again!! -breaking down-**